Friday, August 21, 2020

Blog Archive Monday Morning Essay Tip Support Conclusions with Examples

Blog Archive Monday Morning Essay Tip Support Conclusions with Examples At mbaMission, we always encourage candidates to  show  their experiences rather than  tell  their conclusions to the reader. For example, a candidate may mistakenly choose to  tell  the reader, “I performed exceptionally well in my job and was promoted.” In this case, the reader is left wondering, “What exactly did he/she do so well to earn that promotion?” The reader needs to understand the whole story for the conclusion to be “proven.” We find that candidates occasionally think they are providing the whole story when they are in fact offering only a single data point: Example 1: “For me, as an avid paraglider, extreme sports are not just a hobby but a way of life.” In this case, the conclusionâ€"that the candidate “lives” for extreme sportsâ€"is not substantiated. One data point is not enough to “prove” this conclusion. Example 2: “For me, as an avid paraglider and budding heli-skier, extreme sports are not just a hobby but a way of life.” With the addition of the mention of a second activity, the applicant’s case becomes more compelling. Example 3: “For me, as an avid paraglider, budding heli-skier, and experienced cliff diver, extreme sports are not just a hobby but a way of life.” This series of  three  examples makes the candidate’s passion for extreme sports undeniable. Of course, we have used a simplified example here and would suggest that a candidate put his/her experience into action and show the passion via experienceâ€"“Leaping from a ten-meter cliff, I…”â€"depending on the context of the essay. Share ThisTweet Monday Morning Essay Tips Blog Archive Monday Morning Essay Tip Support Conclusions with Examples At mbaMission, we always encourage candidates to show their experiences rather than tell the reader conclusions. For example, a candidate may mistakenly choose to tell the reader, “I performed exceptionally well in my job and was promoted.” In this case, the reader is left wondering, “What exactly did he/she do so well to earn that promotion?” The reader needs to understand the whole story for the conclusion to be “proven.” We find that candidates occasionally think they are providing the whole story when they are in fact offering only a single data point: Example 1: “For me, as an avid paraglider, extreme sports are not just a hobby but a way of life.” In this case, the conclusionâ€"that the candidate “lives” for extreme sportsâ€"is not substantiated. One data point is not enough to “prove” this conclusion. Example 2: “For me, as an avid paraglider and budding heli-skier, extreme sports are not just a hobby but a way of life.” With the addition of the mention of a second activity, the applicant’s case becomes more compelling. Example 3: “For me, as an avid paraglider, budding heli-skier and experienced cliff diver, extreme sports are not just a hobby but a way of life.” This series of three examples makes the candidates passion for extreme sports undeniable. Of course, we have used a simplified example here and would suggest that a candidate put his/her experience into action and show the passion via experienceâ€"“Leaping from a ten-meter cliff, I…”â€"depending on the context of the essay. Share ThisTweet Monday Morning Essay Tips Blog Archive Monday Morning Essay Tip Support Conclusions with Examples At mbaMission, we always encourage candidates to  show  their experiences rather than  tell  their conclusions to the reader. For example, a candidate may mistakenly choose to  tell  the reader, “I performed exceptionally well in my job and was promoted.” In this case, the reader is left wondering, “What exactly did he/she do so well to earn that promotion?” The reader needs to understand the whole story for the conclusion to be “proven.” We find that candidates occasionally think they are providing the whole story when they are in fact offering only a single data point: Example 1: “For me, as an avid paraglider, extreme sports are not just a hobby but a way of life.” In this case, the conclusionâ€"that the candidate “lives” for extreme sportsâ€"is not substantiated. One data point is not enough to “prove” this conclusion. Example 2: “For me, as an avid paraglider and budding heli-skier, extreme sports are not just a hobby but a way of life.” With the addition of the mention of a second activity, the applicant’s case becomes more compelling. Example 3: “For me, as an avid paraglider, budding heli-skier, and experienced cliff diver, extreme sports are not just a hobby but a way of life.” This series of  three  examples makes the candidate’s passion for extreme sports undeniable. Of course, we have used a simplified example here and would suggest that a candidate put his/her experience into action and show the passion via experienceâ€"“Leaping from a ten-meter cliff, I…”â€"depending on the context of the essay. Share ThisTweet Monday Morning Essay Tips

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